“Love is a journey through waters and stars, through suffocating air, sharp tempests of grain:
Love is a war of lightning,
and two bodies ruined by a single sweetness”

Carnal Apple by Pablo Neruda

Between wake and sleep I feel the brush of your hand against my cheek as cold as winters breath. I thought I glimpsed you in lightning strokes through my window, heard your steps come and go down halls still echoing departure as night slips by like molasses, the mist of yesterday receding over the lake of time.

So that you may see what is left of me I’ve etched your eyes to mine.
Dismembered by scythes of devastation we scatter like autumn leaves.
You go where gravity pulls you, disappear through shimmering veils or wind
 down my cheek like teardrops settling in the hollow of my throat, conscious
fingers of stars gliding over hoarfrost fields or weeping willows sweeping an ice capped pond.

winterwoman

art by Brad Kunkle

178 thoughts on “Quietus

      1. Between two beings a pure form of love can be experienced if both are genuine in their relationship with each other. An even heightened experience can be felt if they both live truthful lives then that love becomes extremely deep and powerful.

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      1. You deserve all beautiful comments for your writing!
        I’m sure I’d enjoy more of Neruda’s poetry. Just the bit you posted is wonderful. You probably haven’t seen it, yet. I sent you a MerSin. Try not to be too, terrified when you open the mail and see his deformed hideous self. xo
        (There’s an RR there, too)

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  1. “Etched your eyes into mines”, a beautiful way for one to feel what someone else is feeling, to see how they feel and to poetically walk in their shoes…beautiful. The traces of lost tears fading like the wind, spelled love in so many ways. Amazing Rene🌹, just like you.❤️

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  2. Pablo Neruda’s poems are wonderful and your poems are fantastic. I just spent 3 days at the Pacific Ancient and Modern Language Association’s annual conference. It’s a huge event and scholars come from all over the world. I went to some poetry readings, and your poems are so good compared to most of the stuff I heard recited. Most of the academic poetry was predictable, pretentious, self-serving and insufferable. Laurie and I did participate in a poetry open mic where most of the people did what they called guerrilla, street poetry. Those scholars and student produced some really good, meaningful, often heart-wrenching poetry.

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    1. Thank you for the amazing compliment . It would be a dream come true to attend the PAA conference. I would have loved to be present for the open mic experience. These young poets are creating a whole new genre of poetry, I’m reminded of the 60’s Revolution in writing art and poetry. They are addressing a lot of issues through their poetry that as you say is so meaningful and hard for anyone to ignore. Thanks again Tim.

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  3. Holly, very interesting. The picture of the woman wearing a dress of leaves is fitting at least in how I view the words. The words cast a coldness of November where the true, intense love is behind the pair, and now they are dealing with the cold aftermath. Well done, Keith

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          1. Holly, thanks. You are not obscure, but poetry is a matter of emphasis to me. A certain stanza will stand out to me due to more clever wordsmithing or intent. I am sure other stanzas catch the eye more so of other readers. Keith

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        1. During deep meditation there is a sensation of rising above the physical body, one could imagine they are defying gravity. Indeed this would be a temporary but delightful dream like state where one might be a God or Goddess, of course eventually one must return to the status of a mere mortal.

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  4. I have no idea why my computer or WP will not let me answer you on my blog but…I thought blood was thinner in warmer climates as well. Debbie looked it up, because everyone says the same thing. That’s the only reason I know it’s just what you get used to. And please pick out your favorite name for the baby rhino and e-mail it to me. I’m going to combine all three of your names together for the Naming Ceremony. 🙂 Thank you.

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    1. There are so many blogs I can only comment (some, even like) in the reader. And now they have made that more difficult by showing a list of all viewers and that flips the reader back up. I’m pulling my hair out ! I like runway for the baby Rhino cause she’s going to be a super model. Xoxoxo

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  5. Oh my, Princess Blue Holly, this was pure gold. “…The night slips by like molasses…” this is a poem I can see and feel. The lead in by Pablo Neruda sets the stage and the image adds the full stop. Alas, my mind would not let it be. The sound of willow branches across ice superimposed by tears on cheeks and neck is an enthrallment I can’t look away from. 🤗

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      1. Well earned Rene, I just have to get out what I think or I might blow a dendrite O’ring or a neuron gasket 💥. You are probably the only poet that could stop my heart with a single line. No hit on the other fine talent in WP world, it’s just you are that good. I’m taking notes in this class. 😍

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          1. Waaa haaa haaaa! I’m lucky in that all my coworkers are cut-ups and we feed on each other’s wit and humor until there is a total breakdown of productive discipline and that’s when work gets fun. That probably wouldn’t work in your line of work unless everyone can keep it on the downlow. 😂😳🙄

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          2. I think you definitely have to start out with your serious face on until the patient is under and then the party can start unless I’m the patient and then the party can start early. I find the nursing staff is always grateful for less whining.

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          3. We’re going to rock around the clock with some good music, install mud tires on our walkers, burn our Depends, and go get us some outdoors in that good ole southern Floribama sunshine. The skeeter repellent will be on the house. I’d say I can’t wait, but I will. All good things happen in their own time. 👨🏼‍🦳🧓🏼🎉

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          4. LOL 😂 I plan to free us from Depends dependance and I think Twerking competitions will not only be good exercise but will help strengthen that area that often depends on Depends so we can return to our boxers and thongs. I’ll make sure you get an invite to the performance as a guest judge. 👩‍⚖️

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          5. I think my siblings along with my first born would get a hoot out of their bro making a twerk video to bring awareness to geezer shaming. My last born would change her name and move to a country with no YouTube. Sadly, she grew up with too much emphasis on public decorum and good manners.

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          6. There has to be grocery bags of money in twerking videos or no one would do it, right? LoL 😂 I’m afraid to Google that. I’m not sure I want to know how much the global Twerk industry is worth. But, when I start up the Twerk in the Home, it will be a whole new genre of twerk, bwaaa haaaa haaaa! Oh, my god, I gotta stop. I’m getting a visual in my mind of that.

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          7. Waaaa haaaa haaaa! A few margaritas and I’d definitely need adult supervision. A very long time ago, thankfully, After the spell of tequila was cast, a nice waitress asked me to get dressed or leave the restaurant. I was trying to show my friends my tattoos and it got out of control. Denver and Tequila, heck of a combination. 🤪🙄

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          8. I think Denver has a strange effect on people that live at sea level because it’s a mile high….Tequila is definitely medicinal and a major food group too. It’s just in my case, more is not better. 😇🍹

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          9. Hmmmm, now that I think about it, I wonder if all that mile high tequila and twerking is why my back hurts now? A bit lower and it would be a terrible pain in the booty. Let us proceed in moderation….🤔

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          10. Thank you Rene, I had a few inspiring dreams last night of how to turn fun into cash. We should convene another board of directors meeting soon to look over our profit projections. 🤗😁

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          11. I don’t think I could ever give up on the national twerking championships. Oh my, if you can bake pies I can definitely market them. I’ll use first hand knowledge approach. They can watch me eat a piece of scrumpdillyumptious pie and they won’t be able to resist. 😛🥧

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