Love is a journey through waters and stars, through suffocating air, sharp tempests of grain:
Love is a war of lightning, two bodies ruined by a single sweetnessโ€   Pablo Neruda 

Between wake and sleep

I feel the brush of your hand

cold as winters breath,

glimpse you in lightning strokes.

Listen to foot steps come and go

along corridors of departure.

Mists of yesterdays recede over

rivers of time.

So that you may see what is left

I’ve etched your eyes to mine.

Dismembered by scythes, conscious

fingers of stars glide over hoarfrost fields

or weeping willows sweep ice capped ponds

where my heart became a dying bird.

Mesmerizing Watercolor Art by Steve Hanks | Amusing Planet
Steve Hanks art

106 thoughts on “Quietus

  1. Your words take Pablo’s words “two bodies ruined by a single sweetnessโ€ and depict the ideas and feelings one has, when one of the two is gone.
    So beautiful, dear Holly! xoxoxo

    If I etch in the hoar frost on my window, will I see you on the other side? Will you see me?

    My interpretation now. Perhaps life will take me to other thoughts on another day. xoxoxoxo

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  2. Such a spellbinding piece – beautiful vivid snapshots that leap off the page! โค
    'Dismembered by scythes, conscious
    fingers of stars glide over hoarfrost fields
    or weeping willows sweep ice capped ponds' – this entire paragraph is just *chef's kiss* Wonderful magical verses, Holly! ๐Ÿ˜€

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  3. Love is an awesome power for sure. Lovely work Holly. You write delicately powerful, precise words, perfectly placed to create lasting, clear images. Wonderful! Wishing you a great weekend! ๐ŸŒน๐Ÿ™‚๐ŸŒž

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  4. Holly, you helped us feel her pain, although it could be any gender person (her, him or them). Love lost from a cold hand to a dying heart. I can feel the person recoil from the cold touch. Keith

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  5. โ€œMist of yesterdayโ€™s recede over rivers of timeโ€โ€ฆwhat beauty in that line. It really pauses the poem to see all its beauty. Loved these placid lines and gorgeous verses Rene.๐ŸŒน

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      1. Always an honor and privilege to read and share your posts with followers, Holly! Hope you are having a great day!! I’m keeping you and yours in my thoughts and prayers!! Actually, everyone living in Florida and Texas – me, what with Variant D going rampant. Loved seeing your post. I know life is intrusive but it’s wonderful to be able to read your words! ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ’•๐Ÿ’•๐ŸŒน๐ŸŽ

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          1. Ditto, here Dear!! Anytime I here things about Florida I think of You and yours! Oh, and the news always makes me think I’d love to talk with you too, but don’t want to bring you down or tie up your time!!
            Heard a great line about those who participated in Jan 6th – Terrorists, Traitors and Trump supporters!
            Not much love on my TV screen on that day!
            ๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ’•๐Ÿ˜๐ŸŒน๐ŸŒน

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          2. Youโ€™re very sweet, we are having a tremendous surge in the COVID variant here as you know , I know itโ€™s bad there too. Our Governor is disgusting and directly responsible for many deaths. That can be said for the GOP and their followers who fail to get vaccinated. I will be in touch with you. Take care. Forgive my rant. โค๏ธ

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          3. So true!! That’s why I’m praying hard, crossing my fingers and doing all the other superstitious things for protection for all of us!
            Hope you have a great week, Dear!
            ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ’•๐ŸŒน๐ŸŒน

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